(一)Fire Prevention on Campus

1. 前段时间校园火灾频发,造成生命和财产损失

2. 分析火灾发生的原因

3. 作为学生,如何预防校园火灾发生

●审题概述●

这是一分析火灾原因和如何预防火灾为中心的文章,撰写时重点即在于此。开篇综述校园火灾频发情形及造成的生命和财产损失,然后说明火灾原因,最后提出可能的火灾预防措施。第一段,主要概述;第二段,说明原因;第三段,详细论述措施。

【范文】

Fire Prevention on Campus

People are alarmed by the succession of campus fires in recent years. In each of these accidents, heavy casualties were reported - houses were burned down, students lost their lives,and properties were damaged. Faced with such a chilling fact, people keep asking, "What on earth results in these repeated tragedies?"

A brief survey of them reveals that human factors still prove to be the leading causes. For example, three of these fires were caused by the students' use of electric water-heaters. As students often leave the heaters unattended, the risks are rather high should the water in the bottle boil dry while no one is around to turn off the power. In other cases, fires were also caused by stoves, candles, cigarette butts, etc.

Since most of these disasters could have been prevented if proper precautions had been taken, students should be better educated on the importance and measures of fire control. The following three reminders are of particular importance for us students: First, learn how to use a fire extinguisher. Second, double-check candles, heaters, stoves and other electric appliances, and make sure there are no open flames before leaving rooms. Lastly, do not smoke in the dorm.  

◇第一段思路点评:

概述并引入下文

◇语言点提示:

(1)此句What on earth results in these repeated tragedies?常可作为过渡句,引出下文

(2)注意描述有关火灾客观事实,多使用被动语态,如are alarmed by,were reported,were burned down,were damaged,Faced with。

◇第二段思路点评:

论述火灾的主要原因是使用电热水器,还有造成火灾的次要原因是实用电炉、蜡烛和乱扔烟蒂,

◇语言点提示:

electric water-heaters电热水器

◇第三段思路点评:

详述预防火灾的三点措施,注意使用连接词语first, second, lastly。

◇语言点提示:

take precautions采取预防措施

fire extinguisher灭火器

(二)Enhance Awareness to Guard against Campus Thefts

1.校园盗窃案件时有发生

2.物品被盗的原因

3.学生如何加强防盗意识

●审题概述●

这是一篇论述校园物品被盗和加强防盗意识的文章。第一段,主要陈述校园盗窃案件发生的情况。第二段,主要分析校园物品被盗的原因。第三段,主要阐述学生怎样增强防盗意识。

【范文】

Enhance Awareness to Guard against Campus Thefts

"If you don't want to wake up and find you have no pants to wear, you'd better put them on in sleep," goes a popular joke among students. Obviously, campus thefts have become increasingly annoying as they occur far more often than before. And it seems that the thieves are less choosy these days, with their targets ranging widely from bikes, cell phones, purses, pre-paid IC cards to sunglasses, bags, and even underwear. In short, anything that worth a dime is likely to be stolen.

What makes students the easy targets? The reasons are not hard to find. But I believe of all these reasons, the lack of anti-theft alertness is the most important. For lack of alertness, the students tend to leave the doors and windows wide open during sleep at noon or at night in summer. For the same reason, they'll also leave their bikes unlocked before a store or by a road, or forget to take away their personal stuff before they go out of the classroom to make a phone call. These acts undoubtedly have increased their exposure to the light-fingered monsters.

In order to minimize possible losses, the students must stay on guard in the first place, as awareness of the thefts around often makes a big difference. To be more specific, the students should not hide any tempting amount of cash in the dorm. Put it in the bank instead. Besides, do not leave any valuable items unattended. Take them wherever you go. In addition, it's advisable to develop a neighbourhood watch programme with other students in the dorm and neighbouring dorms.

◇第一段思路点评:

陈述校园盗窃案件发生的情况

◇语言点提示:

it seems that此句型表示一种可能性

◇第二段思路点评:

说明被盗原因

◇语言点提示:

(1)What makes students the easy targets?此句引出下文

(2)anti-theft alertness防盗意识

(3)lack of alertness缺乏警惕

(4)light-fingered小偷小摸的、惯行扒窃的

◇第三段思路点评:

阐述如何加强防盗意识

◇语言点提示:

注意关联词语in the first place,Besides,In addition的使用可使行文更富逻辑性。
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